Filk, sort of: "(Know Know Know) This Is What We've Got"

[rainsometimes]

The Gintama opening song "Know Know Know" by the band DOES has a fantastic melody and very cool, engaging lyrics. However, I went ahead and wrote new lyrics in English that aren't a translation at all, but are intended to fit the "Farewell Shinsengumi" from the POV of several characters. Redundant perhaps, but I wanted to try it. These are lyrics intended to be sung to the full version of the song, currently available here. The lyrics below are spoilery up till episode 311.

I want this to be singable, and did my best trying to match the song's rhythm to the new lyrics. But this is always subjective. I think the chorus is pretty easy, but for the verses and the break I decided to make it clearer by underlining the most stressed syllables/notes.

(Yes, I removed one of the "Know"s of the chorus (it's four in the original, three here). I couldn't fill out the rest of the line easily otherwise...*^_^*)

I have also post a non-underlined version on Tumblr here.

Suggestions on how to improve this are very welcome! Please tell me if you feel I've messed up grammar or phrasing.


First verse and chorus: Hijikata POV, ep 308-310, reflective. His "your" is directed to Kondo.
Second verse and chorus: Gintoki POV, ep 308-311, reflective. His "you" is directed to Kagura & Shinpachi.
Break (or is it "bridge"?) and third chorus Katsura POV, addressing Kondo, episode 310.
Fourth chorus Kondo POV. His "you" is directed to the Shinsengumi.

Hijikata:

The battle’s lost and we are left behind
With all our struggles now here we stand forsaken
The man we follow is too good and kind
And to protect us he has agreed to take the fall
Now this heavy burden is crushing me slowly
I can’t see
All these thorns are crowding out my view...

Yes, I know know know this is what we’ve got
Fight on through, rewarded or not
All I need is to stand by your side,
Oooh Ooh Oooh Ooh Ooh Oh


Gintoki:

The ground is shifting underneath my feet,
My head is ringing with memories that call me
The little world I fought so hard to keep,
Is crumbling fast now and vanishing right out of reach
But I know that you will keep standing by me
Let’s go on
For a job we’re taking on our own!

Yes, I know know know this is what we’ve got
Fight on through, acknowledged or not
Here we come with friends by our side
Oooh Ooh Oooh Ooh Ooh Oh


Katsura:

It is time to let go of old enmities
We will only see the dawn if we stand as one
Take the hand of this outlaw in front of you
And there'll be
No sacrifice -!

For I know know know this is what we've got
Fight on through, acknowledged or not
We can't lose now we're on the same side
Oooh Ooh Oooh Ooh Oooh

Kondo:
Yes, I know know know this is what we've got
Fight on through, rewarded or not
All I want is to see you alive
Oooh Ooh Oooh Ooh Ooh Ooh Oh

All:
Yes I know - Our time is now
Yes I know - Our time is now