Repost fic: Still There (re-write)

A few days ago tonko_ni posted a very lovely fic called "Granted" which I think everyone should read if they haven't already. Sooo good (sighs).

Reading it put me in mind of a shortfic of mine from awhile back that takes place the same time, in part. It's not nearly half that good but I thought it was OK, until I looked it up and realised I wasn't happy with the beginning and ending lines at all. Thus I felt prompted to make it at least a little less awkward.

I've been kinda hesitant about what to do with this re-write - maybe I should just quietly edit the old entry, as I've done with other minor tweakings and additions. After all, I haven't changed the dialogue, which is still the central part of this. Only the beginning and ending are changed. (And constructive criticism would still be very appreciated.) But it does feel subtly different to me now, not just somewhat tweaked and polished. So, what the hell, I'm making a new post after all.

Title: Still There
Word count: 332
Spoilers/setting: Set the night right after chapter 439
Rating: G, worksafe
Pairing: Luffy/Usopp

( This started out as dialogue only )